marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,

further first-person philosophy

Though just a bit this time:

If you have several first-person points of view in the story, and I have to flip back to the chapter opening to remember who this one is. . . .

You REALLY need to work more on their voices.

There's no point in switching point of view characters if the characters aren't different, and if they are first-person, this needs to come out in the voices. 
Tags: point of view, style

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