marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,

further flowery fluff

When I have established that the heroine likes flowers and gardens. . .

When I send her through the forest where there are glades filled with wildflowers. . .

THEN -- no matter how desperately she is looking for something (and she's not phenomenally desperate, too early in the plot), she IS going to notice the flowers.

Perhaps I will emphasize how she regards them as a distraction, albeit a very tempting one, but she has to notice them. The passage is just not flowery enough.
Tags: characterization, local color, point of view, travel

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