marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,

dithering and openings

Am I dithering too much in the opening? 

Mind you, I have her face a problem on the first page and get stuck with some work (which I immediately foreshadow may have implications) on the second.  Still hitting the implications is going to be on at least the sixth page. 

Some of the stuff  is world-building, but only some of it establishes how out of place she is.  I may just be having too much fun.  This is seldom as interesting to the reader as to the writer.

Push it off to revision, I suspect.  

Still do have decide how her parents died.  When she was too young to remember them. . . .
Tags: beginnings, conflict, families: parent/child, foreshadowing, local color, set-up

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