marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,

darkest hour

Sticking on a scene. . . .

The obvious problem is that the heroine makes a suggestion with insufficient motive. Then she and the hero do not debate it long enough and with good enough reasons.

But the fundamental reason is that it has to be their darkest hour. They have run out of all plausible and implausible escapes from their plight. Which is why the heroine makes a suggestion, and the hero takes her up on it, despite the obvious danger.

Especially to him. She feels guilty but there's sound reason why it has to be him.

So I'm going back in the story and working with two other scenes and thinking maybe they should not be in same chronological order for all the characters involved. . . which means that the character who has them in a different order has to look the same in both, so the two of them don't realize it. It would be a time when he concentrated on doing something, so there isn't a big gap between them for him. The fun of time-travel stories.
Tags: conflict, motives and purposes, plot devices, story structure, story time

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