July 26th, 2016

A Birthday

starting too late

I think the story started too late.  The heroine is about to have the great adventure -- but she's thinking in the past perfect too often, remembering a young woman lion tamer, how she came to the menagerie and learned it was a bad name, and more.  A warning sign, a dangerous one -- like putting a flashback in the first pages.  On the other hand. . . .
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