marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,

of worlds and words

Ah, there's a difference in taste in the butter, and she's thinking about how it was back --

On the planet?  In the kingdom?

I have managed to avoid the "Raining on Mungo" syndrome.  Even the smallest of the seven worlds in this system has over a hundred kingdoms -- principalities, commonwealths, whatever -- and the two largest have, I think, over a thousand.

This would make it rather more logical for them to think of their home kingdoms rather than their home planets.  Of course, that gives me a powerful need to connnect planets to places before whatever incident it was, and if the reader doesn't pick up on that, it means the clue to the planet is missed. . . .

Unless it's common to several kingdoms.  Hmmm.  Hmmm.  Hmmm.  One could definitely do it for the sky color, but even food is possible -- assuming, of course, that the character traveled on planet as well as off planet. . . .

Such are the things that need to be thrashed out!

Tags: character voice, dialog, exposition, style, thinking, travel, world-building: food, world-building: geography

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