marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,
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escape. . .

Ah the delights of revision.

Escape.  Not metaphorical, or for the reader.  The characters need to make an escape.

Our heroine finds that one of her servants, technically under her authority, has done a lot of damage in the place where they are guests.  For reasons that can't be clear to the heroine, the damage is worse than it looks.  And her hostess can't say that because then our heroine, and her other servants, would spread the news. This makes the hostess even angrier.

Hmm. And come to think of it, they knew the heroine intended to leave at about the time the damage was done. Looks like she knew and approved. . . .

So the question is, how does the heroine get away? Especially since she doesn't have the money to cover it, and can't even hand over what she has, since she will need it to travel.  I re-read what I had written and couldn't believe I thought I had managed to rescue her by that.  Even if I let her act like that -- the high-handed snit -- there's the little matter that she wouldn't actually succeed just with that.

Of course, unbeknownst to her, she has a clue in hand. If she happens to mention it. . . .

Hmmm. Maybe I can get the hostess angry enough to attack magically. Gives her an ironclad excuse to flee.
Tags: motive (source), revision, travel, world-building: economics
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