marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,
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a man with a gun in hand

Glaring at an outline thinking I need, in Raymond Chandler's phrase, for a man to come through the door with a gun in his hand.  (Despite the tendency of that technique to make the story episodic.)

The problem with that is I don't know what that would be in this world.  Not even a wizard with a wand in his hand, because if it's a real threat, it would escalate the story too quickly.

If they were back at their own school, they would know what to do.  Perhaps this venture out was a bad plot decision and should be excised. . .

Ah, well, first I will let one of them ponder what they would do, back at their school, and then I will bring in the students who imitiated them but are now leaving their tutors for schools.  Then -- we'll see.
Tags: genre, outlining, plot twist
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