marycatelli (marycatelli) wrote,
marycatelli
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clearing up mysteries

The battle's over, the queen's installed on the throne, no one's arguing --

So they gather around the breakfast table to talk.

I think this needs some paring down -- but not so far that when the actual insights are made. Because running around in loop-de-loops in time and the city was not the best time to piece together clues.

<I>sigh</I> I think it needs another pass.
Tags: discovery, endings, revision
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